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Fanfic: Tenderness; My first attempt at a KonoSetsu fic
Topic Started: Feb 3 2007, 06:03 AM (18,450 Views)
The Shiny Sword
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... you... are ... awesome.
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Jisatsu
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Excuse me while try to get my brain to dish out a coherent response amidst all the happy squeals inside my head.

Okay, that doesn't seem to be working so... OMG! YOU UPDATED! And so quickly too! It was many, many levels of awesome, especially that last line and the whole realization that they're going to get married, hahaha. Kudos to you ^_^

Will you be writing about the wedding too? Or y'know, freeing themselves from their kimonos (in a completely innocent way, of course)? :lol:
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Every KonoSetsu shipper's dream, come true in the form of a fanfic.

BEAUTIFUL!
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Dobbles
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waaah you did it again <3333
I loved konoka's reaction with her Uber Glomp of Love (as i have named it) XD
The Ending to that part was priceless, poor Secchan can't take all the information piling on top of one another XD
I agree with Jisatsu, will you be writing about other things? and the innocent help-you-out-of-your-kimono? XD
Keep this up, You just put yourself on my "Favorite Fanfic Writers" List X3 Can't wait! eeeee!
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The Shiny Sword,
*smiles* I'm glad you seem to like my story!



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Excuse me while try to get my brain to dish out a coherent response amidst all the happy squeals inside my head.

Okay, that doesn't seem to be working so... OMG! YOU UPDATED! And so quickly too! It was many, many levels of awesome, especially that last line and the whole realization that they're going to get married, hahaha. Kudos to you

Will you be writing about the wedding too? Or y'know, freeing themselves from their kimonos (in a completely innocent way, of course)? 

Jisatsu,
:lol: Yeah, I updated... didn't have much time to write today, but still, all this encouragement and I just have to write. Ahaha, marriage plans, well, the marriage would be several years into their future, I suppose we will see. And again with the innocent kimonos I see *chuckles* would you be terribly disappointed if there would be an "innocent disrobing" (no promises now) in other clothing than kimono? :P



WitchCirce,
Why thank you! *bows bows* ^__^



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waaah you did it again <3333
I loved konoka's reaction with her Uber Glomp of Love (as i have named it) XD
The Ending to that part was priceless, poor Secchan can't take all the information piling on top of one another XD
I agree with Jisatsu, will you be writing about other things? and the innocent help-you-out-of-your-kimono? XD
Keep this up, You just put yourself on my "Favorite Fanfic Writers" List X3 Can't wait! eeeee!

Dobbles,
Uber Glomp of Love? Aww, how cute! :)
*chuckles about that kimono thing* Well, the story doesn't seem to be over just yet, for one thing I have a date in mind... and something about Secchan in a suit... then there might be something with a mischievous Evangeline... but I guess we'll see. ;)
I made your Favorite Fanfic Writers-list? O.O Wow *_* Thank you!


And thank you all for putting a smile on my face tonight. *grins*
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Furu Kei
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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!

That was...was...was...*no words to describe*

I love it. Love love love love lovelovelovelovelovelove this fic...

*has been rereading it again and again*

Thank You for such an awesome fic...and a quick update too!!!

I hope you will continue writing such wonderful KonoSetsu!! I will be eagerly waiting for new updates/uploads/posts from you<33

Just like with Dobbles, you have become one of my favorite fanfic writers, too!!!

^.^<33

-Furu Kei
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“Then don’t watch us, daddy!”

I definitely love this sentence. Lol after Konoka found out that shes goin to marry Secchan, she turn into a kid.


[from this chapter I took it as before the omiai , both of them already found out that they both love each other? because its seem like Secchan didnt get/feel discomfort by Konochan display of affection durin the omiai.]
edit: lol ignore this because when I re-read everythin there's something that I misread.

lol anyway ur fic is a happy and direct fic xD

will there be more ? ^^

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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!

That was...was...was...*no words to describe*

I love it. Love love love love lovelovelovelovelovelove this fic...

*has been rereading it again and again*

Thank You for such an awesome fic...and a quick update too!!!

I hope you will continue writing such wonderful KonoSetsu!! I will be eagerly waiting for new updates/uploads/posts from you<33

Just like with Dobbles, you have become one of my favorite fanfic writers, too!!!

^.^<33

Furu Kei,
*big silly smile* Why thank you! :D
Say, aren't you the author of "Half of a Soul"? If so I'm a fan of yours too. ;D




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[from this chapter I took it as before the omiai , both of them already found out that they both love each other? because its seem like Secchan didnt get/feel discomfort by Konochan display of affection durin the omiai.]
edit: lol ignore this because when I re-read everythin there's something that I misread.

Rutee,
Ah, you're mentioning something that I've been hoping to write about in the next bit or so... The way I see it, at this point the girls may be kissing, but they haven't really had the chance to talk and certainly not had the chance for any "I love you"s. ^-^ The lack of protests on Secchan's part (I did try to write in her discomfort at a few places, though perhaps it didn't come across too clearly) I'm thinking is mostly because she has been completely railroaded and shocked to the point that her brain shut off several hours earlier. ;D

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Lol after Konoka found out that shes goin to marry Secchan, she turn into a kid.

Heh, I don't know, it might be because I've only seen the anime, but Konoka strikes me as someone impulsive, that _really_ doesn't care about appearances... and that once she knows what she wants she'd really go for it. ;P I'm sorry if it comes across as terribly out of character.

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will there be more ? ^^

That's the plan! I've got a few ideas anyway, and I was hoping to sit down and write them out just about... well... now. :lol:
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Heh, I don't know, it might be because I've only seen the anime, but Konoka strikes me as someone impulsive, that _really_ doesn't care about appearances... and that once she knows what she wants she'd really go for it. ;P I'm sorry if it comes across as terribly out of character.


lol dont worry about konoka part , I never said that she's OOC ^^. Since u mention that u only seen the anime then I understand. I've seen the anime and manga, I prefer Konoka in the anime then in the manga ahaha...

'I love you' after all the kissing that happened? sounds interesting I would love to see what plot u have in mind

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'I love you' after all the kissing that happened? sounds interesting I would love to see what plot u have in mind

`Al

Rutee,
"I love you" doesn't always come first after all, and, well, I guess that's just how things seemed to go with this story. ;P



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Speaking of which, here is the first little snippet of what I suppose would be the third part. I know not much happens here, I'm sorry about that... should I still go with it?





TENDERNESS 3






After the end of what had been her own omiai Sakurazaki Setsuna still would not have been able to clearly describe what had occurred during it. The last twenty-four hours were a blur filled with shocking revelations, outrageous events, and of being ordered around, and she had still to get her bearings. Two things were very clear through it all, however, and that was the image of her beautiful ojousama in her new kimono, and the other the sensation of Kono-chan’s weight and warmth and lips when they kissed.

Which proved right there that everything must be but a long, elaborate dream. Any moment now Setsuna would wake up and the dream, the happiness, would drift away. She would be Setsuna the unworthy again, destined to love and watch over her ojousama from afar.

Pale fingers traced with wistful longing over lips where Setsuna imagined she could still feel Kono-chan’s warmth.

The odd thought struck her that if this was just a dream, then what perversity in her was it that had imagined Evangeline-san as Setsuna’s guide and aide? The diminutive blonde had been present in the principal’s office when Master Eishun had guided her there, and after all other aspects of conversation had been over with, Evangeline-san had told all present that she had gone through Setsuna’s things and come to the realization that not even the robotic Chachamaru had such an abysmal wardrobe, and that she needed to amend that.

Chachamaru, naturally present wherever her Master was located, interjected that she had quite an extensive wardrobe since her Master enjoyed dressing her up, causing the tiny vampire to give a flustered rant before calming down enough to issue orders. In the end Evangeline and Chachamaru had met up with Setsuna and Master Eishun after the two latter had spent an hour or more with a tailor that was going to make an outfit for Setsuna to wear by morning, and Evangeline had badgered Setsuna into trying on various items and clothing in all the stores in town, most of which Setsuna was more than happy to forget. The seemingly endless shopping spree under Evangeline’s control resulted in a mountain of bags and boxes that nearly had Setsuna throwing a panic fit, but the vampire had of course insisted that Setsuna absolutely needed every single item bought.

Evangeline and Chachamaru had, when they had returned to campus and Setsuna already felt tired beyond belief, then proceeded to supervise Setsuna as she put the clothing away, Chachamaru painstakingly instructing Setsuna on proper storage and caring for what she was handling, and Evangeline thoroughly explaining when and how each thing was to be worn.

By the time they were done it was thankfully time to be present when the principal was given his daily report from the guardians of the school, and after that the principal and Master Eishun kept Setsuna with them until rather late at night, handling paperwork and other matters, as well as having strange conversations with her that Setsuna could not quite grasp the significance of.

Master Eishun and Chachamaru had arrived early the following morning, and after a light breakfast and brief – and failed - meditation the three of them had gone to collect Setsuna’s new outfit from the tailor. Chachamaru had helped arrange Setsuna’s hair in a fashion that Evangeline apparently had decided upon, and then they had gone to meet up with said imperious blonde and the principal.

The car had taken a detour to the hotel where the omiai was to take place, coming to a halt a small distance behind the hotel in order for Evangeline and Chachamaru to get out. Without asking Setsuna nonetheless was informed that the hotel had been built on what was technically speaking still part of the school’s property, and therefore Evangeline could access the smaller rooms attached to balconies in the building without crossing the line of her curse. It was the access to these rooms that was a bit tricky, leaving master and robotic servant to sneak in from the back as the rest of the group drove up to the main entrance.

What followed then, essentially from the moment Setsuna’s adored ojousama stepped through the door, was just too surreal. Somewhere along the line Setsuna stopped resisting, listening to the voice inside that said that yes, it might all be but a dream... but it was a sweet dream, and there were no harm in allowing herself to dream it. And so she tried to go along with it, hoping morning would stay far, far away.

Before she and Chachamaru left the building Evangeline had a brief conversation, or rather an order to give, with Setsuna on the balcony. Apparently the dinner reservations that Setsuna had been told to make in the Konoe name at a rather well-known restaurant in town were not, as Setsuna had believed, for Master Eishun and ojousama, for when Evangeline all but commanded Setsuna to take Kono-chan out on a date the following day that was the place she was told to take her date to. Evangeline then sternly told Setsuna to wear a certain outfit that the blonde had picked out for that specific purpose, and Setsuna had better remember how Evangeline had told her to wear it, or else.

Kono-chan had clung to Setsuna’s arm and sighed happily about their ‘first date’ after the child-like vampire had left, but they were soon after parted as the principal’s company and Master Eishun’s company took separate cars away from the hotel. The car Setsuna travelled with took another detour – complete with another threatening reminder about the date - to deliver Evangeline and Chachamaru to their cottage before returning to the dorms.

Thus it was that Setsuna was now finally in her own room, lying on her back upon the bed staring unseeing up at the darkened ceiling, having not bothered turning on the lights. She had also forgotten to change out of the clothes she had worn to the omiai, having basically just entered and thrown herself at the bed, deep in thought.

Setsuna did not know that in another part of the building, somewhat earlier, the girl that occupied her spinning thoughts had rushed back to the room she shared with her friends, thrown the door open, and squealing hurled herself at her friend and roommate of several years. After being drawn around the room in a bouncing kind of dance Asuna had managed to ask what was going on, to which the exuberantly happy brunette had declared that she was going to get married. The confused red-head had wondered if her friend had somehow hi-jacked Setsuna’s omiai, and that had started a long and surprisingly squealing, and surprisingly detailed, account for everything that had happened.

The amount of time telling her story and answering her friends questions took meant that it was quite some time before Asuna’s help could be enlisted in removing the kimono and restoring hair and general looks to something resembling normal, but once that was done a certain Kyoto-born heiress with a big smile on her face and with feet that only barely touched the ground was happily making her way towards the room where her beloved lay, obliviously staring at a darkening ceiling.


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Evangeline then sternly told Setsuna to wear a certain outfit that the blonde had picked out for that specific purpose, and Setsuna had better remember how Evangeline had told her to wear it, or else.

That part made me giggle uncontrollably.

True, not a lot happens in this section, but it's exposition for the next section! I say keep it.
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ehehe....*blushes* uhmm...yeah.

Furu is the novice author of Half of a Soul and a few other KonoSetsu fictions...

^.^ thanks for the compliment.

hmmn...really nice intro to the new topic. While it is true that not much happens, you carried the transition wonderfully, and the piece was well written. I hope to see the continuation soon!!!!

You are amazing<33 to be able to write with such speed...and wonderfully, too.

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Speaking of which, here is the first little snippet of what I suppose would be the third part. I know not much happens here, I'm sorry about that... should I still go with it?


Continue of course! xD

`Al
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That part made me giggle uncontrollably.

True, not a lot happens in this section, but it's exposition for the next section! I say keep it.

WitchCirce,
*grins* Glad I could inspire a giggle with that, then.
And thank you, hopefully this next bit, though small too, will be a little less... well, boring. ;P



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hmmn...really nice intro to the new topic. While it is true that not much happens, you carried the transition wonderfully, and the piece was well written. I hope to see the continuation soon!!!!

You are amazing<33 to be able to write with such speed...and wonderfully, too.

-Furu Kei

Furu Kei,
The next little bit will follow below, and strictly speaking I don't suppose much _really_ happens in this one either, just... heh, well, you can see for yourself. ;D
And thank you so much for the praise, it is because you guys give me such encouragement that I'm able to write like this, normally I would not be quite able to. :D *happy dragon*

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ehehe....*blushes* uhmm...yeah.

Furu is the novice author of Half of a Soul and a few other KonoSetsu fictions...

^.^ thanks for the compliment.

I think I've read at least some of your other stories as well, I just like that one especially much. :D I love the chibis especially, they're so adorable - like I've gone on about in reviews (as Ryû). ^___^
Can't wait for the next chapter!



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Continue of course! xD

`Al

Rutee,
Thank you! I'm doing my best. :D




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Now what was that thing everyone wanted to read, again? Aaah, innocent disrobing of Konoka, was it? Hmm... almost. ;)




TENDERNESS 3 (continued)







Konoka bounded up to her precious Secchan’s door and not so much knocked on it as she declared in a loud voice that she was coming in, leaving the startled girl inside to just barely manage to scramble to a sitting position before she entered.

“Secchan!” Konoka blinked at the slight dusk in the room, but continued undeterred. “Can I turn on the light?”

“O-of course, ojousama.” Setsuna stuttered while trying discreetly to straighten herself out.

“Mou! Again with the ‘ojousama’...” Konoka pouted as she switched on the light, but broke out into a big smile as she turned towards Setsuna again. “You know, Secchan, people will get the wrong idea if you keep calling your girlfriend ‘ojousama’.”

That said she bounded over to the bed to sit down and attach herself to Setsuna’s side while the other girl blushed furiously.

“I-I-I see.” Setsuna stuttered while glancing shyly at the girl burrowing into her shoulder. “Girlfriend?” The last was spoken very softly, Setsuna sounding somewhat unsure of herself.

Konoka smiled gently up at her blushing love. “Yeah, girlfriend or fiancée, whichever you think sounds better Secchan.” She stroked the fabric at Setsuna’s throat. “This looks so very good on you Secchan... you are quite handsome.”

While Setsuna mumbled something indistinct in reply Konoka eyed the clothing a second time, this time with a slight frown. “Shouldn’t you have changed by now though, Secchan?”

A sheepish look. “...I forgot.”

Konoka chuckled softly. “Yeah, we’ve had quite an eventful day, haven’t we?” Gently touching a pink cheek before standing up she added “I’ll help you change.”

As the suddenly wide-eyed warrior was about to stutter a panicked refusal the smiling brunette effectively silenced her with a single finger to Setsuna’s lips. “Silly Secchan, you had help putting it on, didn’t you?” Konoka was quite amused at her Secchan’s bashfulness. “You’ll need help to take it off, and I’m already here. Now come, stand up and turn around.”

Before Setsuna knew it she was standing with her back to Konoka and stripped to the waist save for the cloth bindings Setsuna wore around her chest in lieu of a bra. Dream or no, this day was apparently all about making Setsuna experience new levels of embarrassment, she thought and did her best to resign herself to the constant light-headedness that accompanied one of her strong blushes. Oh if only she had not been so terribly prone to them in the first place.

On her part Konoka was slowly coming to realise that for some reason seeing Secchan half-naked now was quite different from the several times they had already been naked in each other’s presence before. It seemed strange that after sitting next to one another in the bath in the altogether, yes even helping each other with washing hair and such things, that the mere act of undressing would be so... intimate and awkward. Although, come to think of it, Secchan had always been rather awkward in the bath, ever the shy one, and it had been Konoka that had pushed onward enough times that the other girl had seemed to get used to it. But why was it so different now?

Perhaps it was the fact that this time they were truly alone. There was no safe buffer of noisy classmates with them here, no-one at all present that would hold them back if they...

Blushing rather badly herself Konoka snapped her thoughts away from that track, trying to focus instead on the slender figure that was standing so stiffly in front of her, and not indulge in somewhat... risqué... daydreams. She chuckled a little, charmed at the bright pink of Secchan’s ears.

For someone so strong and competent it was always something of a shock to see that once those clothes were off, Secchan was actually a quite small and slender girl. Although those arms were muscular it was in a lean way, not quite revealing that under that flawless pale skin hid the strength to hurl an opponent twice Secchan’s size across the room, or to catch Konoka’s fall in open arms without the slightest waver. Mesmerized Konoka wondered what it would feel like to touch that soft fair skin and feel the hidden strength underneath...

It was Secchan’s gasp and the procession of pink down towards pale shoulders that made Konoka realize that she wasn’t just imagining what it would feel like to run her fingers down Secchan’s mostly naked back; she was in fact slowly running her fingers down the other girl’s spine.

The strong shudder going through Secchan’s form at her touch brought out Konoka’s more mischievous side, and she leaned in towards the bared neck until her breath was searing hot on the very base of Setsuna’s head. “Are you cold, Secchan?” She barely noticed that her own voice had gone suspiciously husky as Konoka found herself fighting a sudden urge to fasten her lips to the spot where her breath, quite intentionally, had just warmed fair skin.

“YES!” Setsuna yelped, startled and shivering.

“Then I’ll... warm you right up.” Konoka giggled and pulled her arms around Secchan’s waist, pressing herself tightly against the almost bare back. If Secchan had been stiff before, at the sudden move she turned absolutely rigid.

Which was exactly what Konoka had counted on as her fingers moved around... and jabbed mercilessly at some very ticklish spots.

“IIIIIIIIIIIYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAA!” The secretly very ticklish girl howled and tried to squirm away from the one person who knew this particular secret, but Konoka had a good grip and a few really good spots in reach. They ended up on the floor, Setsuna trying to block or pull Konoka away but were squealing too hard to be able to summon up her usual strength.

Then the door was flung open. “Setsuna, you sleeping?”

The couple on the floor froze, Setsuna flat on her back and only half-dressed with Konoka straddling her waist, one hand trying to pin Setsuna’s arms above her head while the other suspiciously much looked as if it was in the middle of undoing the straps in Setsuna’s hakama.

In the doorway the slightly stunned-looking Tatsumiya Mana froze as well.

Both girls on the floor spoke up at once, voices squeaking somewhat as they hastened to explain. “Its not what it looks like/We’re just...”

Mana cut them off with a swiftly lifted hand. “Setsuna, we are to meet with the principal before going on patrol today.” A slight pause. “I will wait for you outside his office.” And then she was gone, the door closed firmly behind her.

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That...was the best ever. I demand you keep it <3 I laughed so hard at this part:

The couple on the floor froze, Setsuna flat on her back and only half-dressed with Konoka straddling her waist, one hand trying to pin Setsuna’s arms above her head while the other suspiciously much looked as if it was in the middle of undoing the straps in Setsuna’s hakama.

It was priceless and gave me mental images that i can't post on this board. (shame on me -whacks self-)

I can't wait for the next part, I'm running out of things to say cause you are so awesome that awesome isn't a strong enough word anymore ;w; I'll be eagerly awaiting the next peice. <3 to you! Hail Ryuchan!

Let's hope mana doesn't say anything at the meeting XDD
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