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| Fanfic: Tenderness; My first attempt at a KonoSetsu fic | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Feb 3 2007, 06:03 AM (18,445 Views) | |
| icha-kun | Feb 16 2007, 11:10 PM Post #106 |
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Yay! Tenderness 4 is finally posted...You're the best Ryûchan! :D |
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| Ryûchan | Feb 17 2007, 03:24 PM Post #107 |
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Serai, Err, no... to be honest I hadn't even given any thought to pactios of any kind, though of course they ought to have had one by this point. What exactly is involved in a permanent pactio anyway? *curious* I might not write it in for this story, but it could be interesting for another at some point.
Shanejayell, Aww, I'm sorry... no pactio. :( Believe me when I say I had trouble enough wrapping my mind around the wedding part. ^^; Sorry about that.
Icha-kun, :D Thank you Icha-kun! Here's another snippet, I just hope it didn't turn out too badly. ^^; ---------------------------------------- Writing this I came to the realization that I do not really know the details of what goes on at a wedding... and My Friend Wikipedia could only offer some information on western and Japanese weddings in broader terms. So... my solution is what you see here, and I can only hope it did not turn out too badly. ^.^;; Oh and a short snippet, sorry... its been hard to write today. TENDERNESS 4 (continued) So came the day when childhood friends turned lovers would wed, with all the paraphernalia as befitting the Konoe name. Before the sun had begun to rise Mana, Kaede, Evangeline and Chachamaru came to take Setsuna with them and aid her with her preparations for the day, while others would come to do the same for Konoka. The day ahead of them was long and with a somewhat complicated schedule, and so Konoka and Setsuna each had a group of helpers to get them through all the necessary preparations on time. The actual marriage ceremony was a traditional one, held at a famous Shintô shrine where a long line of Konoka’s ancestors had done the same, in equally full traditional gear. Rather than both women wearing wedding kimonos it had been agreed upon that Konoka wear one and Setsuna wear the male counterpart, something which suited her fine as Setsuna felt far more comfortable in that attire anyway. Konoka was calm and solemn as she waited for the ceremony to begin, however Setsuna had that morning been caught up by a bout of nerves and nearly fainted, twice, as she was led to the shrine by her friends. Evangeline rolled her eyes with an air of exasperation, but in truth she found the whole thing very amusing. After the ceremony it was time for the traditional wedding photos, where Evangeline and Asuna were asked to join the family on either side to honour their importance to the young couple, which proved a bit tricky to handle before a suitable camera could be enchanted that would be able to capture Evangeline’s image. The rest of the guests headed out to the luxurious hotel that the Konoe clan had booked up completely for the grand three days of celebration, to change into less traditional festive attire, and some of them to put the finishing touches on the prepared second ceremony to be held outdoors behind the hotel. The second ceremony was a western one and performed mostly due to a specific request on Konoka’s part, a short exchange of vows, Konoka in a simple white wedding gown and Setsuna in a white woman’s tuxedo, followed by the exchange of rings. It took place in a large white pavilion decorated with flowers that Ayaka had personally overseen as a favour to the couple, and then the wedding reception was to be held out there as well. Later in the day, when the newlyweds took their leave, the party was set to move indoors where the hotel had prepared for drinking, dancing and singing for as long during the three days as the guests wanted. There were dining and swimming and various calmer and quieter forms of entertainment available as well, and all the guests were given rooms in the hotel for the duration. The vows were exchanged, along with the rings, and then sealed with a kiss which had most part of the gathered guests cheering and clapping. Then came dinner, with toasts and speeches, and the fancy multi-layered wedding cake, which one part of the newlywed couple in a few quick movements with a sword had managed to cut up in nice, even pieces for all present. A strangely stunned applause followed that event, until the expected cake-feeding part was started by Konoka. Konoka had her own ideas on how to eat her wedding cake, as was evident when Setsuna’s dainty attempts to eat were made for naught by Konoka smearing her face with the frosting. Setsuna was not given the chance to react before her eager wife had attached herself to her intended task of cleaning the mess she had created... with her lips. When the time for the wedding waltz came most of their friends were amused to see that despite a few years of practice, Setsuna, though not that bad at dancing by now, still had to leave it to Konoka to lead. They danced several dances together, eventually joined by the other couples present and several girls whom in lieu of dates danced with their friends. The most eye-catching couple besides the newlyweds themselves proved to be Kaede and Mana, because they were unquestionably the best dancers, and as they swept past on the dance floor their matching long, tight and darkly shimmering dresses pulled all eyes towards them. Asuna and Ayaka also called for attention, though not necessarily in a good way, as Asuna had bounded over to Ayaka and asked her for a dance which the other woman accepted with a blush... only to discover in short order that they both kept trying to lead. Some time later, when the blue skies were slowly starting to tint towards grey, the party was still going strong and therefore only a small group of people noticed the newlywed couple preparing to make their exit. Those that did followed Setsuna and Konoka to the hotel doors, adding a few more well-wishes and congratulations, as well as a few suggestive remarks that made the couple rush their farewells and fairly sprint to the elevators that would take them up to the floor they had to themselves with the honeymoon suite. --- Konoka giggled as she clung to Setsuna’s neck in the elevator. “Paru is so funny.” Absently she fingered the buttons on Setsuna’s shirt. Setsuna pointed at the not-so-hidden elevator camera and smiled wryly. “Actually I think she has been watching too many science-fiction shows. Break a what? And how?” “That’s just how she is.” With a content sigh Konoka leaned against her wife. “Secchan, what was grandpa saying to you earlier, after the dance? I saw you get all red before daddy dragged him off.” “Ahh...” Setsuna chuckled a little at the memory. “He clapped me on the back and told me that I had his permission now to go ahead and work on those great-grandchildren he wants.” Konoka’s laugh echoed pleasantly in the confined space. “I’m still not sure what he expects me to do though.” “Mmmm...” Konoka purred and looked mischievous. “Don’t worry Secchan, I have plenty of ideas.” She leaned in to whisper huskily in Setsuna’s ear. “You know, I had them send up Eva-san’s wedding gift earlier.” That had been another moment of unspeakable mortification for Setsuna, as they had gotten to Evangeline’s gift and the unsuspecting warrior had opened the lid... stared uncomprehendingly... and then, her face more red than a traffic light, closed the box with a snap. Ever curious, Konoka had grabbed the box to have a look at the contents herself as Setsuna helplessly continued blinking. The little blonde hellion had waggled her eyebrows and smirked at them, and said something about the item being made special just for them and carrying an enchantment that Setsuna in particular would come to appreciate. With her wife giggling completely without any trace of embarrassment Setsuna had thought herself doomed to more teasing, until salvation had appeared in the form of Chachamaru calmly informing them that the item in question was created with a technique that her master had created herself, causing the tiny blonde to blush violently as well and start screaming at her servant. Setsuna had snagged the box from Konoka before anyone else present decided to see for themselves what was in it, and hid it deeply among the other gifts. With an almost frightened look at her love, Setsuna wondered if she had hidden it well enough. Konoka grinned and gave her wife a quick kiss. “I’m just joking, Secchan.” The elevator doors opened and Konoka stepped through but stopped to give Setsuna a look over her shoulder. “Or am I?” And then she was off laughing down the corridor with her wedding dress hiked up and Setsuna blinking after her for a moment, dumbfounded, before taking up the chase with a grin. “KONO-CHAN!” --- |
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| Jessie | Feb 17 2007, 04:23 PM Post #108 |
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It's just so cute XD Konoka is so ecchi! XD I like it! XD I can't wait to read what they're going to do in their room :rolleyes: *dirty thoughts* |
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| Yuki | Feb 17 2007, 06:25 PM Post #109 |
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DURRR I mean, DURARARARA
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I just read the whole thing ZOMG, you are SUCH A GOOD WRITER!!! WOW!! I wish I were as good as you! But when I write fanfic, I always illustrate it.... XD |
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| icha-kun | Feb 17 2007, 07:12 PM Post #110 |
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Yup! It was a good chapter... Finally they getting married.. :lol: |
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| shanejayell | Feb 17 2007, 07:17 PM Post #111 |
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*rotfl* Good old Eva. :) Love her. I have to admit I'm not as happy with this chapter. Where's the rest of the students? Is Negi there? Did Asuna and Ayeka get into a fight before, during or after the ceremony? I wanna know! |
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| Yuki | Feb 17 2007, 07:42 PM Post #112 |
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DURRR I mean, DURARARARA
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I love it so much, I'm printing it all off!!!! XD |
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| Ryûchan | Feb 18 2007, 03:38 PM Post #113 |
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Jessie, *laughs* Erm, I hate to disappoint you but I won't be writing a sex-scene. I mean, I imply it and all, probably a bit much (though this is the marriage part so I kind of think it should be there), but actually writing a sex-scene? Sorry Jessie. ^^;;Feel free to keep using your imagination though. *winks and grins* +
Yuki, :D I'm glad you like it that much, Yuki! *bows* Ahh, I'd love to illustrate some, however it has been just way too long... I did get one fanart piccy for this story though! *loves my piccy* :D
Icha-kun, ^___^ Thank you! And yup, now they're married. :lol:
Shanejayell, If you read the next part you might see why I didn't mention much about the others in that one. You'll also get a few answers, I think, though whether Asuna and Ayaka got into a fight at the time of the ceremony? Hmm... no. *grins* Anyway, sorry that it wasn't quite what you expected. ^^; ----------------------------------------------- TENDERNESS 4 (continued) It took a while after Setsuna and Konoka left the party, but eventually those that considered themselves in charge of the event got the party to move on over to the interior of the hotel. As people moved about the many rooms providing different kinds of entertainment there was a kind of natural separation where the former Mahora students drifted away from the other guests to party by themselves in a smaller room. Considering the sheer number of Mahora students present there were more than enough with them alone to keep a fairly decent party going, and so they did. Evangeline had monopolized a pile of pillows in spot against the wall where she had a good view of both ends of the strangely curving room the Mahora gang had relocated to, and she lay there leisurely sipping wine that Chachamaru provided from her spot next to her Master. Or at least those that noticed hoped it was wine, since with Evangeline one could never quite be sure. As Chizuru claimed control over the karaoke machine in the lower end of the room, belting out some song or other to the cheers and whistles of Natsumi, the twins and Kuu Fei, the cheerleader girls jointly took possession of the self-serve bar at the top end and proceeded to make drink combinations which they then forced upon unsuspecting classmates with varied results. Evangeline amused herself by making quiet comments to Chachamaru regarding whom would pass out first from excessive partying, and whom would pay for it the most come morning. To her surprise Evangeline soon found herself joined by a number of her former classmates, beginning with Mana and Kaede that suddenly slid down to recline in a joint heap at Evangeline’s right, glasses of something much too colourful and decorated in their hands. Upon their heels Haruna flopped down to Chachamaru’s immediate left, armed with a tray filled with snacks and a deck of cards, smirking evilly as she arranged her treasure bags around herself. “...on my foot!” Ayaka and Asuna came carrying more snacks and soda to go around, busy quarrelling lightly with one another and not exactly paying much attention to the rest of the world, as usual. “Hey! It wasn’t my fault that you...” Haruna hauled them down, making Asuna sit down next to her own seat and Ayaka next to the slightly cuddly couple. “There! Now, what do you say we play some cards while we wait for Kazumi and Sayo to come back with the book?” There were groans and eye-rolling –the last one from Evangeline – in reply to Haruna’s suggestion. It tended to get a bit dangerous to engage the bespectacled girl in any game where she could claim penalties as her prize, and card games were something she had bamboozled far too many of her classmates with far too many times for anyone to take the risk. Several of the girls present privately shuddered at the memory of something particularly embarrassing or unpleasant that had been their payment to Haruna at some point in the past. “If you’re waiting for Kazumi and Sayo you’ll be waiting for a long time.” Evangeline chuckled, holding her glass out for Chachamaru to refill. “Chachamaru and I spotted them dancing on a secluded balcony a while ago.” Chachamaru turned her head to stare into nothing at a slightly odd angle. “My sensors indicate that my little sister is still located on the balcony. It is likely that Asakura-san is there also.” “It’s pretty incredible...” Asuna shook her head and raised a plastic cup with some orange-coloured soda in a salute. “You are the only one that could have come up with a way to give Sayo-chan a body by having her haunt a robotic one.” Evangeline hid a small smile behind her glass, affecting an indifferent look. “Yeah, well... let’s just say that this way paparazzi and ghost-girl owe me.” Asuna smirked and put her cup down. “Eeeevaaa-chaaaaan!” She squealed and charged the small blonde to roughly muss up her hair. “Soo cute! You’re just soo sweeeet Eeevaaa-chaaaan!” “GET OFFA ME, ya moron!” Evangeline groused and pushed the playful redhead away. “Honestly, no respect at all...” She grumbled some more to herself as Asuna, grinning at a mission accomplished, returned to her seat. “Dancing alone on a dark balcony?” Mana spoke mildly, ignoring the growling vampire struggling to get her hair back into order. “How nice to know that Asakura-san has a romantic side.” “Oh?” The woman Mana was using for a partial arm- and backrest leaned forward slightly to catch her eye. “This one can find a dark balcony of our very own to dance on if you would like de gozaru?” The offer earned Kaede a small kiss and a look full of promise for later. “Oho? Let’s all just hope this hotel has lots of sound-proofing on their rooms, if that look is anything to go by.” Haruna teased, winking at the reclining couple across from her. “Unlike the dorms.” Mana gave Haruna a faintly amused look. “I’m afraid you must be mistaking us for some other couple from our old class. Kaede and I are never... loud.” “Nin-nin.” “Oh god! You guys just had to remind me, didn’t you?” Asuna complained loudly, covering her eyes. “Have you any idea what it was like living next-door to those two? There’s a reason they got an entire floor booked all to themselves, let me tell you that!” The other women laughed softly and Asuna continued. “I swear it just took a couple of days after they moved in together before the ‘oh god Secchan yes yes!’ started up... I’m scarred for life! Not to mention poor Negi.” “Yes, I think we’ve all had our share of evidence to Konoka and Setsuna’s... friskiness.” Haruna grinned and stirred her drink with a straw. “But it got better once Negi taught them the silencing spell, right?” Asuna nodded and flipped herself until she lay flat on her pillow, unaware that in doing so she was somewhat flashing the blushing blonde sitting directly opposite her. Ayaka cleared her throat and tried to look away. “Speaking of Negi-san, does anyone know where he went? I think I lost track of him somewhere during the dancing.” “Negi-bozu and his girlfriend went for a walk outside de gozaru.” “Aa... Negi is so grown up now.” Asuna sighed forlornly. “Baby brother is all grown up.” She wiped at her eyes and, after a moment, sat up, walked over to the pillow next to Ayaka, pulled it closer and finally flopped herself down on it with her head in Ayaka’s lap. “Little baby Negi is all grown up, Ayaka!” Asuna sniffled into Ayaka’s lap, and the tall blonde unexpectedly providing the pillow blushed deeply but still patted the weepy redhead soothingly. She shared a sheepish look with the others. “I guess Asuna is a bit more drunk than I thought she was.” Evangeline said slowly, a bit surprised by the outburst. “Who is sharing their hotel-room with her?” “That would be me.” Ayaka said, looking even more awkward but never ceasing to stroke the head in her lap. Concentrating on Asuna she never saw the sympathetic looks sent her way. “Ah, alright. We’ll help you get her to your room later on, then.” Mentally Evangeline added Asuna to her list of hangover victims. She sighed a little, having hoped the redhead would have a bit more sense than getting herself plastered like the rest of the children. A movement at the door caught the girls’ attention, as in came a grinning Kazumi and a shyly smiling Sayo holding hands and also waving a white leather-bound volume around. “Finally!” Evangeline made a gesture of feigned impatience. “What took you two so long?” Kazumi smiled and indicated the white scrapbook as she and Sayo sat down in Asuna’s abandoned seat. “We have printed the wedding pictures, Evangeline-san.” Sayo replied with a soft cheerful voice. “Little sister, you should not try to deceive Master.” Chachamaru reprimanded mildly, causing Sayo to look confused. Evangeline smirked evilly at the new arrivals. “Yes, I see... it must have taken so much time to print those digital pictures out there on the dark balcony.” Kazumi grinned sheepishly and put a hand behind her head as if to say ‘ah, you found out’, but otherwise did not care. Sayo however blushed and apologized to Chachamaru and Evangeline both. “I am sorry Evangeline-san, Chachamaru... -ane.” The white-haired girl hesitated, still not used to Chachamaru’s determination that she was now her younger sister due to the nature of her physical form. At least Chachamaru had ceased insisting that Sayo address Evangeline as ‘Master’ as well. “It wasn’t my intention to deceive you.” Taking Sayo’s hand Kazumi interrupted, not liking it when anything made Sayo sad or uncomfortable. “Hey, did you guys want to see the book or what?” She held it out so the others could crowd around it for a better look. The white leather-bound scrapbook was a joint wedding gift for Konoka and Setsuna from several of their friends, and would be delivered to the newlyweds in the morning as the last of the wedding pictures would not be ready until then. It had pictures of Konoka and Setsuna together as small children, though pictures of Setsuna had been hard to find, more as they were at Mahora, including pictures taken at their omiai, before and after their first date – Asuna had been sneaky – their engagement and various other pictures, up until their wedding. The official wedding picture would go into a special compartment at the front, and the pictures Kazumi had taken decorated several pages inside the album. A third of the book was empty, leaving space, Kazumi explained, for future anniversaries and children. There was some fussing over the cuteness of Konoka and Setsuna as children and some amused reminiscing over the pictures of the school years, both before and after the engagement, until finally everyone had their little laughs over both cute and funny wedding and wedding-reception pictures. “So...” Haruna looked at Mana and Kaede. “When will it be your turn at this?” Kaede laughed softly. “We are not in quite as much of a hurry as these two.” Mana leaned into her lover slightly. “Your answer would be: when we feel it should, I think.” She turned to Evangeline with an unreadable look on her face. “When you mention Setsuna and Konoka having children, do you mean the usual, like adoption, or have you and the others found a viable means for Setsuna and Konoka to conceive?” Evangeline smiled somewhat evilly and leaned back. “We believe we have. Why, are you interested in having a... go at it?” Leaning back into her lover’s arms, Mana and Kaede shared a look. Then Kaede grinned even wider than usual. “Nin-nin! We would, in due time de gozaru.” The evil grin grew wider. “Oh goody, I’ll have some time to come up with a... suitable... form of payment before then in that case.” “You are so kind, Master.” “Chachamaru!” Evangeline sighed deeply as the rest of the girls laughed. She got no respect at all these days. --- |
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| Jessie | Feb 18 2007, 03:50 PM Post #114 |
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Oh no! no! XD don't see me like that! XD I'm not a pervert! (ok, maybe a little, I won't deny). I DO NOT read any H-fanfics, and stuff like these, I'm too embarrassed to read it! I was only joking with my little perverted side XP |
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| BAKA NO JITSU | Feb 18 2007, 06:19 PM Post #115 |
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roflmao. god so hilarious |
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| shanejayell | Feb 18 2007, 06:47 PM Post #116 |
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Kawaii! :) I likey much. |
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| Jisatsu | Feb 18 2007, 07:52 PM Post #117 |
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I bet they were rabbits in their past life, haha. Haven't seen you online in a while so I'll just drop a note here, lol. Great updates as always, big mama XD Will we be getting to see more of this... ‘oh god Secchan yes yes’ even though you won't be writing out the sex scene? ;D |
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| Furu Kei | Feb 18 2007, 08:43 PM Post #118 |
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Sorry for not having much time to reply to such wonderfulness... x_x----->been busy with so many things... ^.^ you are awesome<33 and your fic is.... *blushes* >.> so...blushingly good >.> Oh! and I hope to talk to you again sometime<33 ^.^ -Furu Kei |
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| Yuki | Feb 18 2007, 11:06 PM Post #119 |
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DURRR I mean, DURARARARA
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It took me a little while, but I got to get the picture up. ![]() I hope you like it, it's also going to go up in my thread.... ![]() Okay... I'm going to go on about it. ![]() Um, I do like the way I drew them, this is not fan art, it's just my art, ^^ um.... I haven't drawn these two together before either. So... first time for everything.... Let's see..... um, I didn't get to shading it all. So it looks a bit off. But aside from that, I'm quite proud. ![]() Remember though that this is just a sign of how much I enjoyed reading your fanfic.... |
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| Jessie | Feb 19 2007, 02:12 AM Post #120 |
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Ohhh It's just like the scene in the fanfic! ^__^ Sugoi! ^__^
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Tenderness 4 is finally posted...




I mean, I imply it and all, probably a bit much (though this is the marriage part so I kind of think it should be there), but actually writing a sex-scene? Sorry Jessie. ^^;;



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