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|Vincent "Vinny" Lachance|
|Topic Started: Jul 1 2011, 11:42 AM (157 Views)|
|Night1422||Jul 1 2011, 11:42 AM Post #1|
Full Name: Vance Lachance
Alias: Vinny or Vile
Birthday: Aprolla 11
Elemental Affinity: Water
Psionic School: None
Current Bounty: 200,000,000 Florins
Items on Hand: Med. pack, Sea stone family ring, Wolf hides, Rope and Grappling hook
Weapons: A steel silver trimmed short sword, A Iron blunderbluss
Aspirations: The destruction of the Exonian Army and Goverment
Current Occupation: Fugitive
Workplace: Streets of Exonia
Pets: A large silver feathered sparrow named Lanius
Appearance : Vance is roughly the average height, and weight for a 21 yer old strongly built from Training in swordplay and running form law enforcement, His hair is a deep shade of jet black and is ragged and spiked considering he never has time too fix it.
Clothing: A hooded black cloak with lightly made steel chainmail under the cloak, he wears iron greeves intead of boots and he wears black gloves.He uses the cloak and gloves because it hides his identity,the gloves because he have a long scar on his palm.
Personality: Vance is described as wild lazy and very fast and active when required, Hes been marked for a pyscological evalutation because of how he smiles and laughs when hurt, injured, Or caught by the guards
- Exonian Goverment
- Law Enforement
- The Gullotine
- The Gallows
- Can easily blend into a crowd
- Pro Swordsman
- Socially Awkward
- Has Schizoperania
- Getting caught
Byron Lachance(Father, Deceased, Executed)
Maria Lachance(Mother, age 47)
Serah Lachance(Sister, age 11)
History: Vance was born on the eleventh of Aprolla, When he was old enough too start school his father Byron was executed for treason and the murder of a member of the Exonian Ministry, After that Vance tramatized started showing sighns of childhood schizoprenia. So he didnt start school till 1st grade after that Vance was on the walls of the Exonian slums as a wanted poster after high school for murder of another student, Along the way he found a sparrow egg, he hatched it and took the young sparrow as a pet and named it Lanius, and currently he is wanted for 3 more murders 7 counts of thievery and for forged war plans of the Exonian army. He is very protective of his little sister and will do literally anything too protect her, even if it means death or being caught by law enforcement.
Edited by Night1422, Jul 2 2011, 08:43 PM.
|Night1422||Jul 2 2011, 08:40 PM Post #2|
||Hope you like my post ^W^|
|Mako ✿||Jul 3 2011, 07:49 PM Post #3|
Doesn't it sound familiar?
So yeah, you're going to need to run this through a spell check and make sure your grammar and punctuation are clear in your writing. There are just too many errors in this post to begin evaluating it any further. Plus you didn't provide a RP sample (basically we wanna see your story-telling writing).
I would definitely like to see more description in these categories:
- Appearance (Eye color? Skin tone? Try to avoid saying "average height and weight" because what IS the average height and weight in our world? It's just better to be specific. You definitely don't want to beat around the bush when it comes to writing.)
- Personality (This is just a mess. He just seems to be a mix of everything. But at the same time, this section doesn't seem to say anything about Vincent.)
- History (Okay, so I'm fine with you making the history very vague, because you might not have a full grasp of your character's history just yet, but you're going to have to be a little more detailed. Plus, his 200 mil bounty is too high and those numbers are reserved for special characters).
So yeah, if Ronnie or Jes has anything to say, feel free to add, but this is what I had to say, heh. Do work on it! I know you can do better and if you need help, we're here :D.
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