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| Topic Started: Nov 20 2006, 10:54 PM (496 Views) | |
| Cyndaquil201 | Nov 20 2006, 10:54 PM Post #1 |
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One day Cynda had an idea to write something called "the Ace of Spades". Cynda decided that it would have a boy with black hair as the main character. Then, Cynda made the boy stand at the edge of the Grand Canyon in the beginning of the story. But then Cynda decided to make the story a Pokemon story, and since the Grand Canyon isn't in the Pokemon world, Cynda changed it to a cliff, and changed the boy's hair color. And then, Cynda decided to– wait, Cynda can't tell you any more. So, Cynda posted the prologue of the story here, and now is talking in third person, and then– =whackonhead= Ow. Ok, well, here's the story. Prologue The wind howled over the edge of the cliff, seeming to be trying to push the figure standing on the top to his death. But the short boy didn't seem to notice. All he did was stare down at the bottom, while the cold wind tossed his curly brown hair in all directions, making it much more messier than it had been before. Five Pokemon slept in a heap behind him; a Chikorita, a Pupitar, a Charmander, and two Charmeleon. A Wigglytuff stood watching her trainer, worried. She wasn't his first Pokemon, but she had been his second, and they had bonded much more than he had with Charmeleon. He had gotten her a Moonstone, she had beaten the Ecruteak gym, despite all the ghost types. Eventually, to her joy, he had managed to understand what she was saying. They had been through so much together, and she could tell that something was wrong. Turning, the boy saw the Wigglytuff staring at him. "Oh! You're not asleep?" "Wiggly?" the Wigglytuff asked. Why should I be asleep? "Well," he said, kneeling down to look her in the eye. "I'm sorry, but... goodbye." The Wigglytuff's eyes widened. He couldn't possibly mean... "Tuff!" she shrieked, grabbing to the boy's worn-out t-shirt. "Wiggly! Wigglytuff!" He just took out her Pokeball, and she was recalled in a flash of red light. Standing up, he saw that his other Pokemon were starting to stir, woken by their teammate's cry. Quickly, he grabbed out their Pokeballs and recalled them as well. Then, he put them down on the ground. After a moment, he put his Pokedex down as well. Then they'll know who my Pokemon belonged to. He walked briskly to the edge of the cliff. Looking left, right, and even above, he took a deep breath... And jumped. - The girl remained hidden in the forest until she heard her long-time rival hit the ground. Smirking, she walked out of the darkness. The wind had changed, and now it blew away from the cliff, making her long black hair stream out behind her. The girl walked over to the boy's Pokedex, picked it up, and threw it over the edge. Bending down, she reached for the Pokeballs, when a sound made her freeze. "Kwaaa!" A Pokemon was flying towards her, getting faster and faster until she recognized it. It was Zapdos, the legendary bird of lightning, and he was flying right at her. Terrified, the girl tried to get away, but her foot was caught in a tree root, and she fell down. She desperately tried to get up, and in the process knocked one of the Pokeballs off the edge. She didn't notice it, she didn't notice that Zapdos had swooped down to save it instead of chasing her, and she didn't notice that she had left one of her playing cards in the grass. It was an ace of spades. |
CYNDA used MAX REVIVE!  Sprite credits: Electro (cradily) and Smeargle (awesome thing). Cynda's blog-thing Cynda's List of Interesting Topics By Various People Golden Light : Ileen and the Fire Mountain and other stories : Swordplay : What Pokemon would live in your area? : Dreams : Cynda's Jar of Sprites | |
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| Kronakitty | Nov 20 2006, 11:30 PM Post #2 |
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Hm...it sounds pretty interesting so far. Ace of spades, huh? XD |
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| Axphear | Nov 20 2006, 11:46 PM Post #3 |
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Mysterous... That's really good. Why did the boy jump off the cliff? THe Ace of Spades? LIVE WIGGLYTUFF!! I can't wait to read more. |
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| Cyndaquil201 | Nov 21 2006, 12:01 AM Post #4 |
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I can't say much about the prologue, but I can say that the boy jumped off the cliff of his own will, and no one forced him to. Oh, and that the ace of spades is very important, but I can't tell you why. I'm writing chapter one right now. It might take me a day or two to write, though. |
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CYNDA used MAX REVIVE! Sprite credits: Electro (cradily) and Smeargle (awesome thing). Cynda's blog-thing Cynda's List of Interesting Topics By Various People Golden Light : Ileen and the Fire Mountain and other stories : Swordplay : What Pokemon would live in your area? : Dreams : Cynda's Jar of Sprites | |
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| Zephyr | Nov 22 2006, 02:39 AM Post #5 |
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Haha yay for suicidal main characters. XD Gah, that's so... mysterious. And sad. But I like it- it's hauntingly enthralling and calls me to read more. |
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| Shadow | Dec 2 2006, 04:38 AM Post #6 |
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Yay! Stories! ... Umm, wow, I was kinda late on this. ^^;; This is intriguing. =3 I have so many questions, questions that seal my fate to read the rest of this story. XDD |
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| Agent Myst | Dec 7 2006, 09:52 PM Post #7 |
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Interesting... First sentence, perfect opener. Just jumps right in, out of nowhere...
Ooh, good little description, I assume the Wigglytuff is the one that got knocked off the cliff at the end...
I can just imagine this scene really well...although, after this, it kinda was "anti-pkmn" that Wigglytuff did not come out of its ball, as, remember Psyduck, pkmn can leave their balls and/or refuse to be returned, something to think about maybe for next time...
Interesting way to end the "section"...well done keeping this mysterious, as already stated... Yay for briskly and not quickly! xP
Hm, that seems a bit strange, probably a good reason for it, thoguh...
That has to be Wigglytuff, since you took a whole paragraph describing their relationship...
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| Cyndaquil201 | Dec 8 2006, 02:20 PM Post #8 |
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I remembered that a few days after posting the prologue, but I don't know how to make it work any other way... I'm in the middle of writing the first chapter; it's taking a long time because I keep on getting stuck after writing the first few sentences. I'm not stuck anymore, though, so I might be able to finish by either tomorrow or Sunday. |
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CYNDA used MAX REVIVE! Sprite credits: Electro (cradily) and Smeargle (awesome thing). Cynda's blog-thing Cynda's List of Interesting Topics By Various People Golden Light : Ileen and the Fire Mountain and other stories : Swordplay : What Pokemon would live in your area? : Dreams : Cynda's Jar of Sprites | |
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| Zephyr | Dec 8 2006, 09:03 PM Post #9 |
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Whoo! I'm practically at the edge of my seat in anticipation. Work hard, Cynda! ^^ |
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(RPG info) Avatar by Smeargle the Porygon and it is excellent. [Xerolabs] [Arena][Races] [Agency] | |
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| Cyndaquil201 | Dec 10 2006, 02:27 PM Post #10 |
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ACK I have two or three paragraphs to finish. But, I'm being dragged off on a roadtrip, so I don't have time to finish. No worries, though! I will force my parents to stop at a hotel with free internet if I have to. And I'll have time to finish while in the car. Expect chapter one later tonight. |
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CYNDA used MAX REVIVE! Sprite credits: Electro (cradily) and Smeargle (awesome thing). Cynda's blog-thing Cynda's List of Interesting Topics By Various People Golden Light : Ileen and the Fire Mountain and other stories : Swordplay : What Pokemon would live in your area? : Dreams : Cynda's Jar of Sprites | |
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| Kaiser | Dec 11 2006, 11:44 PM Post #11 |
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Wow, that was cool! Very mysterious. Must read more! |
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| Emi | Dec 12 2006, 01:34 AM Post #12 |
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That was one of the best prologues I've ever read. And trust me, I read A LOT:) |
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| Cyndaquil201 | Dec 16 2006, 09:32 PM Post #13 |
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Okay, well, it's not a full chapter, but I wrote myself into a corner and I don't know how to get out of it. Plus, I feel really bad about not posting it for so long. So, this is what I have so far. I'll be fine if I can just get out of the corner, since I've planned almost everything afterwards. Chapter 1 (part of it) A breeze shook the red and yellow leaves of the maple tree, some falling onto the leaf covered ground. It was most likely the only maple tree in the forest, all the rest being aspens. Whoever had planted it that way long ago may have planted it that way for some reason, but now, many years later, it simply served as a landmark for Tyrell and his sister, Fiona. "So," Fiona said, brushing a few of the leaves that had fallen onto her red hair off, "you saw a big Pidgeot?" "I told you, it wasn't a Pidgeot," Tyrell mumbled, "it was Zapdos." "Zapdos wouldn't come to Johto, he lives in the Orange Islands. Why would he come to Johto?" Fiona replied, as calmly as she could. "Maybe to visit Ho-oh, in the Tin Tower." "The only relation Zapdos has with Ho-oh is that they're both legendary birds. You shouldn't be here chasing after imaginary Zapdos's; I only came to make sure you don't get hurt! There are tons of ghost Pokemon in here! Where to you think Morty got his Pokemon?" Fiona was yelling now, the calmness in her voice gone. "I'm only here because I need to show you proof!" Tyrell yelled back. "If we have to get through the forest to get to where you saw Zapdos now, you were in the forest before when you saw Zapdos!" Tyrell's face turned as red as his hair. Silent, he stood up and started running away. "Tyrell!" Fiona got up as well, but Tyrell was already out of sight." "Agh!" she muttered, "Tyrell wouldn't get lost, but I don't know my way through this stupid forest." - Oops, just realized that both the prologue and chapter one both start with a sentence that involves wind. Should I change that? |
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| Emi | Dec 17 2006, 03:19 PM Post #14 |
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No,don't change that. But make sure that the other chapters' first sentences don't involve wind. Well, not all, but you get the picture. :) |
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| Shadow | Dec 17 2006, 04:18 PM Post #15 |
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I agree, starting with the wind is fine. Nice job with the first chapter, I like it! =D *eagerly waits for more* |
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